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-Given the high number of quality applicants and a limited number of spots, in addition to having a good application profile, you want to show something that makes you \textbf{stand out}.  For example, even if you do not have research experience, you can talk about your personal projects, as long as they can help show you can do research. For example, if you have an open-source project that has lots of stars in Github, then you should mention it. If you often write technical, research-like blogs with many viewers, talk about them too.
+Given the high number of quality applicants and a limited number of spots, in addition to having a good application profile, you want to show something that makes you \textbf{stand out}.  For example, even if you do not have research experience, you can talk about your personal projects, as long as they show you can do research. For example, if you have an open-source project that has lots of stars in Github, mention it. If you often write technical, research-like blogs with many viewers, talk about them too.
 
-There are other things you might not think are important but can make you stand out. For example, if you have a strong background in a non-CS field but can be integrated with CS, e.g., you have a degree or background in \emph{dance} or \emph{music} and want to integrate them with CS, do talk about it. Are you a female or a minority in CS (\autoref{sec:urm})? Do you participate in outreach activities that help increase diversity and inclusion in CS? Diversity is highly valued in CS programs in the US, and experiences in these areas can make you stand out and get noticed from reviewers.
 
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 In his \href{https://matt.might.net/articles/how-to-apply-and-get-in-to-graduate-school-in-science-mathematics-engineering-or-computer-science/}{post}, Matt Might was initially unsure about an application. However, upon learning that the applicant had led a 100km hike in the Himalayas, he decided to accept the applicant.  This is a good example of being \emph{stand out}, and I would also advocate for that student as this shows they have the persistence and determination required for research.
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 % It is worth noting that in many cases,  an application could be rejected by most reviewers, however have a "champion", who doesn't even have to be in the Admission comittee, that strongly advocate for your profile.
 
+There are other things you might not think are important but can make you stand out. For example, if you have a strong background in a non-CS field but can be integrated with CS, e.g., you have a degree or background in \emph{dance} or \emph{music} and want to integrate them with CS, do talk about it. Are you a female or a minority in CS? Do you participate in outreach activities that help increase diversity and inclusion in CS? Diversity is highly valued in CS programs in the US (\autoref{sec:urm}), and experiences in these areas can make you stand out and get noticed from reviewers.
 
 \chapter{Funding}\label{sec:funding}
 \chapterinfo{TAs, RAs, and fellowships are main funding sources for PhDs.  TAs are provided by the department to help with classes. RAs are given by profs. to help with their research.  Fellowships, provided by the university, department, or external sources such as government or industry, give move flexibility but can be very competitive.}