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       <p>A brief descripion of each track with a link to the more detailed page for each:  
       <ol class="section-list">
-        <li><%= link_to("Community Building", "community.html") %>, including leadership from committed "Champions" who have broad reach; a fair and sustainable Governance framework; and a growing group of diverse participants and skillsets. Certain organizations and skills may be needed only at certain points with one or more tracks. </li>
-        <li><%= link_to("Use Cases & Planning", "use_cases_planning.html") %>, including prioritizing Use Cases (specific challenges, proposed new work and data flows); organizing and scheduling work all the way through to adoption and measuring value; and securing the resources (organizations, Champions, people/skills) needed to succeed. Specific Use Cases attract specific subsets of each specialty.</li>
-        <li><%= link_to("Standards Development", "standards.html") %>, based on compiling clinical experts’ information requirements for each Use Case; incorporating these requirements into HL7 Fast Healthcare Interoperability Resources (FHIR) Implementation Guides (IGs) based on a set of <%= link_to("Design Principles", "design_principles.html") %>; and standardizing, updating, and maintaining the FHIR IGs within the Health Level Seven (HL7) standards organization.</li>
-        <li><%= link_to("Implementation & Testing", "implementation.html") %>, including building FHIR IG(s) into systems and workflows; testing these systems and workflows through test suites and within the types of organizations ultimately planned to host, use, and benefit from the work; and compiling feedback from testing to update Planning and Standards work. Testing serves to demonstrate the potential value of the work and often attracts additional participants to the Community.</li>
-        <li><%= link_to("Adoption & Value", "adoption.html") %> in the real world, starting by developing an understanding at the Planning track of what factors will move the market. Factors include user demand, Government mandates, and the promise of improved care and research demonstrated during testing. It’s critical to Measure such improvements in the real world, to see where changes could make solutions even better (quality, cost, time) and motivate new participants to engage. Though not shown in the graphic, real world use will lead to additional feedback to any or all of the other tracks.</li>
+        <li><%= link_to("Community Building", "community.html") %>: Community starts with leadership from committed "Champions" who have broad reach; a grasp of key challenges and potential Use Cases; a fair and sustainable Governance framework; and a growing group of diverse participants and skillsets. Certain organizations and skills may be needed only at certain points with one or more tracks. </li>
+        <li><%= link_to("Use Cases & Planning", "use_cases_planning.html") %>: The Community must prioritize Use Cases (well-scoped projects that address key challenges, proposed new work flows and data flows); organizing and scheduling work all the way through to adoption and measuring value; and securing the resources (organizations, Champions, people/skills) needed to succeed. Specific Use Cases attract specific subsets of each specialty.</li>
+        <li><%= link_to("Standards Development", "standards.html") %>: Standards Development starts with compiling clinical experts’ minimal set of core information requirements for each Use Case. Clinical requirements are incorporated into HL7 Fast Healthcare Interoperability Resources (FHIR) Implementation Guides (IGs) based on a set of <%= link_to("Design Principles", "design_principles.html") %>, and standardizing, updating, and maintaining the FHIR IGs within the Health Level Seven (HL7) standards organization.</li>
+        <li><%= link_to("Implementation & Testing", "implementation.html") %>: Standard FHIR IG(s) must be integrated into systems and workflows. These standardized systems and workflows are ultimately piloted within the types of organizations ultimately planned to host, use, and benefit from the work. Feedback from testing is userd to update Planning and Standards work. Testing serves to demonstrate the potential value of the work and often attracts additional participants to the Community.</li>
+        <li><%= link_to("Adoption & Value", "adoption.html") %>: To have value, standardized systems must be used in the real world. Getting there started by understanding during Planning which factors will move the market. Factors include user demand, Government mandates, and the promise of improved care and research demonstrated during testing. It’s critical to Measure such improvements in the real world, to see where changes could make solutions even better (quality, cost, time) and motivate new participants to engage. Though not shown in the graphic, real world use will lead to additional feedback to any or all of the other tracks.</li>
       </ol>
       <p>The five tracks are explored in greater depth by following the links in the above list, and via the Playbook Menu found on all pages.</p>